10 July 2011

#7sins microfic challenge

The seven sins challenge

Day 4, and time for someone that doesn't suffer a nasty end. I think I was most pleased with this one of the seven, not least because it actually came in under 100 words.


Matthew huddles in the darkness of the cupboard as the monster rages outside, shrieking his name as it hunts for him. A bottle breaks as it hits the floor. If Matthew had his way, he would break every bottle in the world before she could get to them. He just has to stay hidden until the drink is all gone and then his mother will cry and kiss him and promise that it will never happen again. The handle of the knife engraves itself into his palm as he prays that he will never have to use it against her.


  1. Wonderful writing and breathtaking! Great job!

  2. I would like to thank you in advance for the nightmares I am going to have tonight. (Smiles)

    This is some awesome stuff!!

  3. Wow! I can see why this is your favorite... Wow... The boy hiding from "the monster" until the drink is gone and it's his mother again... It's not going to end well, and there's a really powerful weight even in so few words suspecting that both characters know it won't end well. Really well done.

  4. I'm going to hug my kid now. So emotional in such a few words.

  5. I really like how the kid differentiates between this being a monster and not his real mother. Very touching.

  6. Wow. I can feel his terror as he waits for his mother to come back to him.

    A x


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